Reviews of Manipulator



  Offical BE Story Club Review

2/17/2004 
 
Instead of my normal review this month, I thought I would just post an excerpt from an e-mail I sent to the publisher concerning this story. It says pretty much everything I have to say about Manipulator. For a proper summary of the story, just read the text in other summary section. The following text was a reply back to the publisher after I was asked to write an alternate ending for Manipulator. This other ending I wrote was included with the story, and is properly labeled as “Alternate Ending.”


OOokay.... I just finished editing Manipulator. Hum... okay, I can't lie to you - I love stories like this, and I thought it was a great story. Furthermore, I think the ending is perfect, and I would have actually been severely disappointed if anything else happened, short of the man dying outright at the moment of proposal. The author's foreshadowing is so ingrained in the story, that nothing else would have made sense. It's what I expected to happen, and it's what other people will expect too - the ones who don't like it or have a problem with the concept of the story will undoubtedly not even read through the whole thing. At most, they'll skim through it and then complain loudly; in my experience there is no middle ground with these kinds of stories. People either like them or hate them with equal passion.


You asked me earlier if I could maybe change the title or make the story "happier." I have honestly been racking my brain trying to think of what I could do to fit this description. First off, I don't think the title of the story is bad. It doesn't seem apparent until about halfway through, but Tom is, of course, the "Manipulator," all the way up until the very end, when that role switches to Jenna. It is a fitting title. Secondly, the character of Thomas is practically built to fall from grace. I think a happy ending would ruin an otherwise consistently-written story. If it were up to me, the only change I would make is to have the ending be even more harsh than before, to really dwell on Tom's reaction and how ironically pitiful his fate has become. This is not a happy story, and I don't really think there is a good way to fix that with a simple ending rewrite. Something of that caliber would take an extensive amount of work, taking out some key scenes and trying to change the over-all tone of the story, which is also very dark.


About the only thing I can think of, is to write a couple of "alternate endings," which could be tacked onto the end of the story as an attempt to appease the readers. And personally I wouldn't really trust myself to do it justice, although I will certainly try if you'd like me to. Along with this edited version of the story you will see an “Alternate Ending,” which I have written to try to make people happy who do not like the author’s ending for whatever reason. In hindsight, I think I could have written something happy, such as Tom having a change of heart and the two of them living happily ever after. But to tell you the truth I was so angry at Tom’s character by the end of the story I wanted to kill him.

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  By : MeI

8/9/2004 
  Not into this kind of subject. Although I thought that the antagonist got what he deserved in the end (for me the second ending was best).

The scences choosen for illustration were perfect showing her at her different sizes and displaying that size well.

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  By : PennyDreadful

6/10/2004 
  Very interesting story. Implants as method was refreshing, the story was well written and the artwork was absolutely incredible (kudos Rocketeer). A lot of dark themes being explored, but that’s not a bad thing (life and fiction can have shadows). As I was reading it, I didn’t know quite where this story would end up, a rare trick in BE. I disagree with others in that I kinda liked the original endings. The story was focused and well paced throughout --- an inevitable tragedy. While it unravels a bit at the end (it ends maybe too abruptly given the build up) it’s still a very good read; above par for the archive and it gets bonus points for taking some risks. I’d enjoy reading more from the same author.

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  By : Breasts

6/4/2004 
  It had a strange ending but overall I enjoyed it but I would like to have seen the main female character's breasts get alot bigger than they actually did.

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  By : Manipulator

2/20/2004 
  Great story marred by two unsatisfactory endings. If a plot twist is necessary for the story to work out (and I agree), it would have been much more effective in my view to have Jenna deliberately murder the objectionable male character by smothering him under her maximum enlarged breasts during heated, marital sex. Jenna would be the real manipulator, a black widow of sorts, having planned the whole thing from day one. Tom, conversely, would get what is coming to him and probably even like it.

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